I wish to dim the voices in my head
Turn the knob and watch it die
As daylight fades my conscience dreads.
As I warmly snug myself in bed
The faceless voices come alive
I wish to dim the voices in my head.
After years of clutter I’ve been fed
The day or date, know not since when
As daylight fades my conscience dreads.
It oft intrudes at night, sodden wings spread
Shrouds me, I choke, I hyperventilate
I wish to dim the voices in my head.
This isn’t the path I’d wish to tread
My heart, my soul, my body aches
As daylight fades my conscience dreads.
By and by erodes the sanity thread
For it may snap and haul me to despair
I wish to dim the voices in my head
As daylight fades my conscience dreads.
© Wordpolitics
( Villanelle for the first time )
Awesome! Very well done. It’s so nice to see someone who respects traditional forms. Keep at it!
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Thank you so much Rob. I’m glad you liked it.
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❤ ❤ ❤
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♥️
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Very well written….n quite relatable….when the mind keeps talking….
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Thank you so much for always reading my posts. 😊
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Very skillfully crafted and lyrically evoked
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You are so kind with words. I feel so good. Thank you so much.😊
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You’re very welcome indeed
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Beautiful!!
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Thanks a lot beautiful ! 😊♥️
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very nice! great expression of subtle feelings!
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Thank you so much. I feel blessed when people read my posts and give such warm feedbacks 😊
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😀
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Beautifully written ☺️
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Thank you so much Nick! 😊
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Great villanelle – I’ve written a couple (among other forms) and find them a very intense exercise
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This is the first time I wrote a Villanelle, was quite nervous. Thank you so much.😊
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This is so so well written. Totally felt the words.
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Awh! Thank you so much dear. I’m glad you stopped by to read.♥️
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You rocked the villanelle!! You made it look easy. This theme was perfect for this form…
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Thank you so much. I’m so glad you stopped by to read. Means a lot! 😊
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Don’t stop writing!
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Awh! That really means a lot.tbank you.😊
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This isn’t the path I’d wish to tread🔥🔥🔥
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Thanks for giving it a read! 😊♥️
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I wish to dim the voices in my head too 😢
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Awhhhh! Who else could relate to that better than me.
Don’t worry it’ll pass.
I would suggest you to practice mindfulness, I know it might sound crap as it did to me once, but trust me it really works. Has helped me a lot and it might help you too.
You stay safe if you wish to talk I’m always here.
Best wishes.
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In fact, I’ve posted a poem similar to this yesterday. The title is Noise.
Mindfulness? I’ll try.
Aww, that’s so kind of you ❤
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I’m gonna check that NOW! 😊
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nicely done!
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Thank you 😊
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This is some deep thoughts. Beautifully written ❤️
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I’m glad you stopped by to read.😊
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the pleasure is all mine
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Wonderful
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Thank you beautiful ♥️
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Hi u from?🤔
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India
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Hi upashna
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Villanelles are so tricky sometimes (at least for me), but you wrote this so beautifully! I love it. I hope you are able to defeat the negative voices in your head 🙂
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Awh! Thank you so much beautiful soul. Thanks for stopping by to read. ♥️
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You’re welcome!! 🙂
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Hlo
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Upashna
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Yes
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I like ur post
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Thank you
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Can we friend?🤔
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Which place you belong
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Same is with me. I think a lot at night.
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Please don’t worry. You are not alone! Just the mind playing tricks . Whenever you feel such remember to divert your attention. Try reaching a friend or grab a book or listen to some calming music.
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Oh my word – I feel a challenge coming on – a Villanelle!!! PS – Always had those voices but they’ve softened as I have got older … 😊
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Oh Laura you won’t believe how happy I am to see this coming from you. Gives me strength and courage to keep going. Thanks a lot beautiful 😊♥️
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Nicely done! It is a tightrope with villanelle and pantoum to get them to end up where you want and for the free voice poet to feel like they haven’t given up their voice in the process of conforming to a structure, but so rewarding when you manage to do both.
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I am so glad you liked it. And thank you so much for reading till the end and sparing a moment for this amazing feedback. I feel truly blessed. Thank you once again 😊♥️
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Congratulations on your first Villanelle! you did a great job:)
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Thank you so much beautiful 😊🥰♥️
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